Atom Bomb

[Endless]

A poem i was working on.

I never do poetry on purpose, I'll just be sitting somewhere, have an idea and write it down. this is one of those poems.

First the sirens blare the news
Then the sound of fleeing shoes
But we know we’ll all be gone,
My sisters sing a mournful song
People run but I don’t bother
Kneel and make my peace with father
We see it coming, diving now
With the horror it’s endowed
A blinding light a searing heat
I know what’s coming, death I meet
It hits, and I am gone too fast
They’ve made an atom bomb at last
My shadow sits against my home
A final marker to my tomb
My hands are crossed up in a shield
An attempt to block what would not yield
And of my body, not a trace
Cast unto the empty space,
But shadow stays as my bodies cast
They’ve made an atom bomb at last

[Mr. Anderson]

You have a knack for it. One of the 4 poems I have read an liked.

8/10. I thoroughly enjoyed it.

[Karl]

Hey, nice one. I enjoyed that actually.

And I went to reading with the impression that I wouldn't.

You're much better at rhyming than I am. I usually do it by accident.

[Joest]

That was way better then what I expected, nice.

[Endless]

Thanks for the compliments guys

[AssaultRifle]

Wow, Endless. Nice poem! I really like it... This is one of the first times you have shown me some form of intelligence from you.

Just kidding. But seriously, it is.

[Endless]

I have others if you'd like to see them

[Karl]

If they're as good as this one, sure.

[Jimbimanim II]

That's a really good poem... And I usually hate poems.

9.2/10

[Endless]

I erased the last peom i put up here because its total crap.
This one i like better.

Why do we have earwax, what purpose can it serve?
It's sticky, slimy, smelly, ugly and it's quite absurd
O why do we have earwax, I find it rather strange
Does earwax stop us hearing words that are both wise and sage?
Is earwax why we go to war, does earwax deafen us to reason
Will earwax block us evermore from living life a silent freeman?
If earwax is not at fault for why we fight and die
Then I fear for us all
Because ourselves must be to blame,
And if we blame ourselves for that than we must also be
At blame for every little thing that's wrong with what we see
With what we see and what we feel but not with what we hear
For earwax blocks many sound from reaching our poor ears
We do not hear the final screams of people, people kill
We do not hear the rapists grunt and huff and heave and pull
And we do not hear the goodness, the sound as it unfolds
We do not hear the butterfly float through the rays of gold
We do not hear, we do not know, earwax makes us deaf
Peace and love are ways of old
Because earwax brings us death

[YSMM]

Really like the first one.

But the second is to Oxymoron-ish (Where too oppisite things are together. Such as Loving-Hate or Deafening Silence.)
The comical part of the poem clashes with the serious part.
I think it would have been a much greater poem if instead of Earwax you had some other noun.

[Area 51]

9/10

[Endless]

Really like the first one.

But the second is to Oxymoron-ish (Where too oppisite things are together. Such as Loving-Hate or Deafening Silence.)
The comical part of the poem clashes with the serious part.
I think it would have been a much greater poem if instead of Earwax you had some other noun.

the point of the poem was kind of the mixture of comedy and tragedy, horror and joy, rapists and butterflies. I guess it was hard to get that across

You have a knack for it. One of the 4 poems I have read an liked.

8/10. I thoroughly enjoyed it.

what were the other 3?

[Forsaken_13]

That first one is really cool.

[Nerevar]

I liked the first one more, but they were both really good.
(And could absolutely beat the crap out of anything I could do)

[Karl]

The second one didn't do it for me. Still an alright poem, though. 6/10.

[Tanktunker]

The first one was really good, the second one not so much.

[denacioust]

The first one was really very good...but just so you know every line doesn't have to rhyme, infact none of the lines have to rhyme...maybe try a more inventive rhyming scheme...

I give the first one 8.5/10...I didn't really read the second one...

[Lifeless]

They were both really good, Endless.
I made one for school...It really stinks...

Oh well...

Whatif?

Yesterday, while I tried to sleep through the rain,
Some Whatifs attempted to hijack my brain
And as they started I could think of scant
But their stupid, annoying, Whatif chant:
Whatif I lose my eye?
Whatif I get attacked by a swarm of flies?
Whatif I something blows a hole in my wall?
Whatif I’m bad at playing dodge ball?
Whatif my cello gets wrecked?
Whatif my reading journal doesn’t get checked?
Whatif I don’t get an A?
Whatif my clothes get ugly and frayed?
Whatif I go insane?
Whatif I get blown up in a pool of butane?
Whatif I fail math?
Whatif I get stinky from not being able to take a shower or bath?
Whatif I can’t move away to my Dad?
Whatif I can’t handle all the homework in sixth grade?
Whatif I only get 2 cents?
Whatif I don’t have enough money for Christmas presents?
Whatif I start dying?
Whatif I get caught lying?
Whatif I get bored from no books?
Whatif I get attacked by somebody with hooks?
Everything seems swell, and then
The nightmare Whatifs strike again!


Ihavenolifeandlikeit=)

[denacioust]

That poem doesnt work at all, the line lengths are way too irregular...

[Lifeless]

Yeah, but I don't really like creating poetry that much anyways.

[denacioust]

Yeah but you could be good...its just that the poem doesn't flow...it takes too much effort to make your poem sound like it should

[Roadkill]

wow nice peoms there i right peotry sometime i might post one later.

[mattz1010]

xD @ earwax of doom

[Roadkill]

the earwax one was pretty good but the atom bomb one was the best.

[Endless]

Thanks for all the comments guys, it means a lot

[Roadkill]

your my inspiration endless I am going to right peostry now!

[Endless]

And I'm sure your peostry will be great

when you decide to write poetry call me.


But seriously, post what you make here

[Roadkill]

ok here we go my first peom now i know its bad but its my first time. Also not everything might ryhme.
A Trip to The Zoo
You go to the zoo hoping for cheer and fun but you soon find out it's an asylum.
The animals are sick or dead they are not looking at you for their lives are through.
You see the people all laughing and gawking pointing at the animals who aren't even walking.
Then you walk past the elephants, giraffes and more to see the only animals alive are a snore.
This animal is a monkey yes a funny looking fellow it is but oh look at that one taking a wiz.
Now do not get to close for monkeys are prone to through poo they put it on their hands and man it flew!
The poo flies high and fast going up and up until at last it falls down with a plop right on your top.
Your mad at the monkeys and rattle their cage but this only fills them with rage.
They fling more poop at you for you have gave them mad stew.
They are angry and ferocious and come close to the cage "oh sweet Moses!"
The monkeys are here now up at the cage grabbing at you with rage.
They tear your shirt they make you bleed and hey one dropped a sunflower seed!
You hit them back but its no use they pull you through the bars like food stuck in a tooth.
You bones are crushed and your head is red but it seems all the monkeys have fled. You there in their cage alone with them you see nothing but bars and sky and a stone.
You feel sick to your stomach and bloated up to your neck you feel like a complete wreck. Then you feel a sudden change hair is growing on your neck like a mane.
You palms are hairy and your nails are long your skin is turning a little cherry.
You clothes are fading and your nose is becoming bigger you teeth are like big stones of silver.
You try to scream "help me please!' but all that comes out are terrible screams.
You cannot speak human but only monkey you are confined to this cage like an rat in a trap you see no way out even with a map.
People now look at you with strange eyes wondering why you're not the ones to die.
You sleep all day and try to escape at night but you can't break the cage with all of your might.
People go to the zoo hoping for cheer and fun but they soon find out it's an asylum.

[Karl]

Whatif?

Yesterday, while I tried to sleep through the rain,
Some Whatifs attempted to hijack my brain
And as they started I could think of scant
But their stupid, annoying, Whatif chant:
Whatif I lose my eye?
Whatif I get attacked by a swarm of flies?
Whatif I something blows a hole in my wall?
Whatif I’m bad at playing dodge ball?
Whatif my cello gets wrecked?
Whatif my reading journal doesn’t get checked?
Whatif I don’t get an A?
Whatif my clothes get ugly and frayed?
Whatif I go insane?
Whatif I get blown up in a pool of butane?
Whatif I fail math?
Whatif I get stinky from not being able to take a shower or bath?
Whatif I can’t move away to my Dad?
Whatif I can’t handle all the homework in sixth grade?
Whatif I only get 2 cents?
Whatif I don’t have enough money for Christmas presents?
Whatif I start dying?
Whatif I get caught lying?
Whatif I get bored from no books?
Whatif I get attacked by somebody with hooks?
Everything seems swell, and then
The nightmare Whatifs strike again!


Ihavenolifeandlikeit=)
You realise that you completely ripped that off of Shel Silverstein, right?

Whatif
from the book "A Light in the Attic" (1981)

Last night, while I lay thinking here,
some Whatifs crawled inside my ear
and pranced and partied all night long
and sang their same old Whatif song:
Whatif I'm dumb in school?
Whatif they've closed the swimming pool?
Whatif I get beat up?
Whatif there's poison in my cup?
Whatif I start to cry?
Whatif I get sick and die?
Whatif I flunk that test?
Whatif green hair grows on my chest?
Whatif nobody likes me?
Whatif a bolt of lightning strikes me?
Whatif I don't grow talle?
Whatif my head starts getting smaller?
Whatif the fish won't bite?
Whatif the wind tears up my kite?
Whatif they start a war?
Whatif my parents get divorced?
Whatif the bus is late?
Whatif my teeth don't grow in straight?
Whatif I tear my pants?
Whatif I never learn to dance?
Everything seems well, and then
the nighttime Whatifs strike again!

[Endless]

ok here we go my first peom now i know its bad but its my first time. Also not everything might ryhme.


A Trip to The Zoo
You go to the zoo hoping for cheer and fun but you soon find out it's an asylum.
The animals are sick or dead they are not looking at you for their lives are through.
You see the people all laughing and gawking pointing at the animals who aren't even walking.
Then you walk past the elephants, giraffes and more to see the only animals alive are a snore.
This animal is a monkey yes a funny looking fellow it is but oh look at that one taking a wiz.
Now do not get to close for monkeys are prone to through poo they put it on their hands and man it flew!
The poo flies high and fast going up and up until at last it falls down with a plop right on your top.
Your mad at the monkeys and rattle their cage but this only fills them with rage.
They fling more poop at you for you have gave them mad stew.
They are angry and ferocious and come close to the cage "oh sweet Moses!"
The monkeys are here now up at the cage grabbing at you with rage.
They tear your shirt they make you bleed and hey one dropped a sunflower seed!
You hit them back but its no use they pull you through the bars like food stuck in a tooth.
You bones are crushed and your head is red but it seems all the monkeys have fled. You there in their cage alone with them you see nothing but bars and sky and a stone.
You feel sick to your stomach and bloated up to your neck you feel like a complete wreck. Then you feel a sudden change hair is growing on your neck like a mane.
You palms are hairy and your nails are long your skin is turning a little cherry.
You clothes are fading and your nose is becoming bigger you teeth are like big stones of silver.
You try to scream "help me please!' but all that comes out are terrible screams.
You cannot speak human but only monkey you are confined to this cage like an rat in a trap you see no way out even with a map.
People now look at you with strange eyes wondering why you're not the ones to die.
You sleep all day and try to escape at night but you can't break the cage with all of your might.
People go to the zoo hoping for cheer and fun but they soon find out it's an asylum.






kind of random, needs a lot of work but the concept is good.

[Roadkill]

I just pulled something out of my head I know it needs work nut I am not that good at ryhiming I dont know alot of words that ryhme.

[Endless]

google search: ryhming dictionary

[Roadkill]

oh ok I will try that thank you. but what should i look for when i type it in like ryhiming dictionary.com?

EDIT: nevermind I found one its pretty cool just type in a word and it comes up with a bunch of ryhimg ones.

[Karl]

Does anyone else care in the least the IHNL plagerized Shel Silverstein?

[Endless]

I was going to say something when i first say it but i thought it was obvious

[Roadkill]

naborr if your not interested in poetry then go away. and endless should i edit my peostry and if so what places.

[Karl]

naborr if your not interested in poetry then go away. and endless should i edit my peostry and if so what places.
Did you even read my posts? It's not that I'm not interested in poetry, it's that IHNL completely COPIED A POEM FROM SHEL SILVERSTEIN.

Oh, sorry, I'll speak in a way you can understand.

raodkil you ned too red my posts okay i think your stupud!!

[Lifeless]

IHNL completely COPIED A POEM FROM SHEL SILVERSTEIN.
Yeah,
THAT WAS THE FREAKING ASSIGNMENT THAT MY TEACHER GAVE ME!!!
I just didn't mention that because I thought nobody would care. But Naborr has to come along, and make me point out the obvious in size 7, red, underlined, bolded, arial black, and VERY angry text.
Geez man, stop attacking my lousy writings. I said that it was for school, what do you expect? Edgar Alan Poe?

[Karl]

Yeah,
THAT WAS THE FREAKING ASSIGNMENT THAT MY TEACHER GAVE ME!!!
I just didn't mention that because I thought nobody would care. But Naborr has to come along, and make me point out the obvious in size 7, red, underlined, bolded, arial black, and VERY angry text.
Geez man, stop attacking my lousy writings. I said that it was for school, what do you expect? Edgar Alan Poe?

You're assignment was to copy a poem? When has that ever been part of the curriculum? Sorry, I don't believe you.

And sorry I'm attacking you for being a plagiarizer. Obviously you should be forgiven and set on your merry way.

Look, just because you're bad at something doesn't mean you get to cheat. I'm bad at Chemistry, but I don't copy other people's answers.

Oh, and: Ooh, I'm so scared of the big red font. Mommy, please save me from the pixels!

[Lifeless]

Naborr, I don't give a #### whether you believe me or not. It's just a poem, for crying out loud!
Let's just forgive and forget actually, that would work better.
I did get that as an assignment for school, and if you don't believe me, feel free to track down my teacher. His name is Charlie Richmond.